Please read the three manuscripts below. Jot down at least three comments. (While proofreading might be helpful to the writers, proofreading comments will not count. That doesn't mean don't proofread; it does mean also make other comments.) Think about the verisimilitude, tone, mood, narrator, characterization, setting, sequence of events, themes, purpose, and audience. I'd like our discussions about the works to become richer.
At the end of the week I will take down the works so unscrupulous writer-wanna-bes trolling the internet will not be able to steal your words and ideas. All outside readers please be advised: The writers retain the copyright to all of these works. Jaret Sears retains the copyright to Cybernation Rising; Sam Curtis retains the copyright to Galaxis; Chad Favazza retains the copyright to Chad's Final Project.
12 December 2007
1 comment:
A bit like transformers,maybe too much. Maybe some background on the younger characters; jake jaret and hannah. Why did the creater guy become an ice cream man,maybe an indication that 5 years had passes. Dialogue could become more realistic instead of complete descriptive sentences.
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